A Personal Analysis of I Have a Dream, a Speech by Martin Luther King Jr

The essay lacks a clear thesis statement or introduction that outlines the purpose of the essay. The author should have started with an introduction that contextualizes the two perspectives (Martin Luther King's and Malcolm X's) and sets out the main points to be discussed. For example, the author could have started with a sentence like: "This essay aims to provide a personal analysis of Martin Luther King's 'I Have a Dream' speech and Malcolm X's perspective on racial inequality, exploring the similarities and differences between the two views." Such an introduction would provide clarity and focus for the essay. The essay seems to jump between discussing Martin Luther King's "I Have a Dream" speech and Malcolm X's perspective without a clear connection between the two. The author should have developed a stronger connection between the two perspectives, perhaps by exploring how they complement or contrast with each other. For example, the author could have discussed how Martin Luther King's emphasis on peaceful resistance differed from Malcolm X's advocacy of more confrontational methods, and how this reflected different views on the best way to achieve racial equality. Such a connection would give the essay more coherence. The essay would benefit from better sentence structure and grammar. The author uses some awkward phrasing and incorrect grammar, such as "Malcolm X summarizes the negative stereotypes attached to black slaves as 'uncivilized', 'uncouth' and so on using alliteration to emphasize how they have been wrongly judged." The sentence could be revised to "Malcolm X employs alliteration to emphasize the negative stereotypes attached to black slaves, such as being labeled as 'uncivilized' and 'uncouth', to highlight how they have been wrongly judged." Such revisions would make the essay more polished. The essay could also benefit from a stronger voice. The author uses some passive language, such as "it seems that the white slave owners gained much superiority at the expense of the low status being assigned to slaves." The sentence could be revised to "the white slave owners gained much superiority by assigning a low status to slaves." Such revisions would give the essay more authority.