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Words: 1606 |
Pages: 4|
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Published: Nov 8, 2019
Words: 1606|Pages: 4|9 min read
Published: Nov 8, 2019
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I came into the US in 2003 to Kent State University to pursue a bachelor’s degree in BA FinanceThe phrase "BA Finance" is redundant because "BA" already stands for "bachelor of arts." Instead, the author could write "to pursue a bachelor’s degree in finance."
I believe that the world is influenced by external factors although my world view is internal. My educational experience has greatly changed my attitudes and believes and the world view in general. I have been taught that I own my knowledge. I have also learnt that I will need to use the knowledge to attain my dependence, my self-discipline and in turn achieve success. These factors have molded the person that I am today, these believes were instilled in me and are as important as they continue to influence my learningThe sentence structure is awkward and confusing. A better way to write this would be "These beliefs were instilled in me, and they continue to be important as they influence my learning."
I have again believedThe use of "again" is incorrect because the author did not mention believing this before. Instead, the author could write "I now believe."
My life in college seemed fantastic at first. I was introduced to partying by my new friends in collage which I quickly embraced. We could drink late into the night and even skive classes the following day due to hangovers. I thought that having primarily focused on education at home, this was my time to 'enjoy' what I had missed. Like most of my classmates, I did not want to be left out and partly due the fact that I did not have a boyfriend from home, I 'acquired' one here in collage. Within no time I realized I was pregnantThis sentence structure is awkward. A better way to write this would be "I realized I was pregnant soon after."
In the year 2004, elections were going on in the US and there were two main political parties which had a stab on the presidency; Democratic and Republicans. On scrutiny of the political ideologies of the two parties, a slight majority supported the republicans and thus Bush was elected the president, too bad non-citizens were not voting and so I was left out to have a say on the president who would rule me in the next 4 years. Only one year into office, many complained that they were shortchanged, and they felt that the president was either partisan or not performing his duties as he should. On closure scrutiny of the two parties' ideologyThe correct phrase is "Upon closer scrutiny of the two parties’ ideology."
I believe that countries should be left to do their own things the way they like. I take an example of the war that America waged against Iraq, though am not supporting Iraq in any way whatsoever I believe that war was unnecessary because the mere reason for America attacking Iraq was to find weapons of mass destruction. But up to date, they are yet to find the weapons. My reasoning is simple; countries should be left to decide on their own destiny. One serious mistake by an individual can affect the whole country and the world as a whole. I experienced the worst in time in trying to achieve the American dream in the year 2005, just given birth, postponement of my studies and now we were being denied jobs as they claimed that the economy was weak and could not support to give foreigners jobs - weak because of trying to fight unjustified wars. My American dream was that no one should judge others simply because they are different or hold different opinions from them.
Life was becoming unbearable, I always thought that because I had led a 'good' life from home then my life should now flow smoothly especially due to the fact that I was in America. How wrong I was. Here I was a successful student not only from my family but also my home country looked forward to completion of my studies because they believed that having a degree from an American University meant that you are among the best. I was destined to work for the blue-chip companies at my home country, but now my life hangs in a balance. I reflected and knew that all these situations should be my turning point. My fall should be my greatest turning point and I felt that I was headed for the best things in life but only if I work for that.
I now realized that life does not give one what they think they deserve but rather you have to work for that. My mere reason of being in America did not just mean that I could realize the American dream, no, but rather work out for it. Fighting for what I deserved was now my driving force. I realized that to realize the American dream that I dreamt for a long time meant that I had to go back to school. And I knew my baby deserved the best, why should she suffer while his father had such a wonderful life, I contacted a lawyer and the father of my kid was given child responsibilities. This enabled me to embark and fight for what I wanted in life and try by all means to achieve it- fight for what I believed could make me realize the American dream at least in my own context. That is the reason that drove me back to school. And I know I will realize my dreams.
Gaining admission in 2003 to study my college degree in America at the prestigious Kent State University to pursue a bachelor’s degree in BA Finance meant to me that my American dream is already achieved. I thought that things will now work themselves out. Unfortunately, I got pregnant and gave birth in 2005, this signaled my deviation of the American dream that I held for a long time. But my educational experience that I had changed my attitudes and believes and how I view America and the world in general. From what I was taught of owning my knowledge, this is what I finally used to attain my dependence, self-discipline and in turn fight to achieve success. During the American war in Iraq, for most of us foreigners it was hard to secure jobs in the US due to a weak economy. This made me believe that countries should be left to determine their own destiny, because after all the so-called weapons of mass destruction were not found. Having a different opinion on some matters should not be a crime. Now after ensuring that the father of my child is held responsible, am back in college to fight for what I believe I deserve and realize the American dream.
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